Twitch

I am Ally Baba
I am Ally Baba

Ally screamed with delight when she saw me walk in. She dropped everything, ran for me, jumped in my arms and nearly knocked the wind out of me. “You’re getting too big to do this Ally!” She giggled. We both knew this wasn’t the last time…

I dropped my backpack by the closet. She yanked my hand and pulled me up the stairs “Come see my room, I’ve got the coolest thing!” As we ran up the stairs I could hear my sister yelling for me from the kitchen. Ally giggled and showed me the shush sign, she pushed me in her room and slammed the door.

I turned around and oddly enough I was alone in the room. “Allyyyy?” The door opened, she walked in with a towel wrapped around her head. “I am Ally Baba,” she said with a comical accent “sit on my magic carpet my child. Sit, sit, hurry, we are wasting much time. Much time indeed is being wasted.” Her left eye twitched. She pointed down “Now!” Twitch-twitch.

I sat down and she forced my legs into an indian position “Do the motus pose,” she said and I stifled a giggle. She sat in front of me, facing me with the same pose. “I will take you to many places,” twitch “close your eyes and make a wish.” I asked her what kind of wish she wanted and she answered with a twitch as her fingers slid down my eyelids.

I secretly peeked and watched her as she neatly tucked her towel back into place. She rubbed her temples and started to chant. I closed my eyes and wished for warmth. I wished her carpet had been blessed with some form of magical alchemy that could keep her forever young. I wished she were my daughter. “Pick one wish my child, Ally Baba can make but one wish. Keep the last one, forget the others.” I opened my eyes and in shocked amazement I watched her eye twitch.

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trifectaTrifecta Week 72
ALCHEMY (noun):
3: an inexplicable or mysterious transmuting

  • Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.
  • You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.
  • The word itself needs to be included in your response.

NOTE: I wanted to play on the fact she called it a motus pose and called herself Ally Baba (like her name) when it is in fact Ali Baba. Kind of like if she could correct her aunt “No, not Ali… it’s Ally!” although the pronounciation is the same, it’s just a spelling thing. But I clocked in at precisely 333 words…

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27 thoughts on “Twitch

  1. That was a pleasure to read.
    More please!

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    1. Gushing… Thanks El! What a kind thing to say!

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  2. Ooooh, Marie, that conclusion, the absolute beauty of a single twitch. The loving bond between an auntie and niece that may be about to change. The motus position was best.

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    1. Giggle… Wow Jessie! Thank you so much, this story was one of those things that just takes over by itself. Don”t you just love it when that happens? I just had to come back and add a drawing to go with it.

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  3. Very nice. I loved it.

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    1. Hey Vin! Glad to see you had a few minutes to take your head out of your books – surviving the session?

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      1. Things have died down for now. I have about a week until the chaos starts up again.

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  4. ha, i like it…cool story…kids are so cool too…little bit of child magic going on in this…smiles.

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    1. Thanks B! Your compliments are always so cherished…

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  5. What a great story don’t you just love kids and their excitement

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    1. Yes, I do. And I was blessed with 8 nieces and a nephew to love and enjoy so much!
      …thanks.

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  6. You have brought the child from within out, in this delightful and entertaining read Marie. Enjoyed very much 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much for reading and saying that!

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  7. Ali Baba knows all, sees all…. ha! Nice twitch at the end. 😉

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    1. Thanks. I think the twitch means a lot…

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  8. That was a fun read, and so many interesting directions this story could go. I hope you take us on that carpet ride.

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    1. Come over to my sister’s place and I’ll ask my niece to take us places… Ha! Wouldn’t THAT be fun?

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  9. The alchemy of growing up will be happening soon! Why do they grow up so fast?!

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    1. They do, don’t they? This story was largely inspired by one of my nieces to whom I constantly asked her to stay a kid forever. She always told me she would do her best… 😉

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  10. Cute story! (:

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  11. kdillmanjones 11/04/2013 — 2:23 pm

    Magical… nice story!

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  12. KymmInBarcelona 11/04/2013 — 4:15 pm

    Love the final twitch. Great post.

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  13. Nandini Godara 12/04/2013 — 5:40 am

    Beautiful story, playfully told!

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  14. Fun!
    Felt like I was there.

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